Sunday, July 14, 2013

Heat

i think
the heat makes us
crazy or maybe i
just want it to be heat not hate
not fear.

heidi
written: 7/14/13 for dVerse Poetics

Claudia invites us to write about heat and mirages this week on Poetics. I am a little too sad today to write something mirthful,  just something that I wish were a mirage.

32 comments:

  1. ooo wicked little short...yes, give us something to blame other than our own failings...

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    1. thanks brian! i get my feelings hurt when humanity doesn't live up to my expectations.

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  2. to much hate indeed. A great little piece...

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  3. Perfect and I agree; especially when i think of the summer 50 years ago

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  4. oh hey...hope the sadness disappears quickly... and yes..better crazy because of the heat than because of other things...

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  5. Lots of things make us all crazy and you really nailed that in these few lines. and to your comment, who doesn't get hurt when others don't meet their expectations?? hope the heat helps you leave that hurt in drops of sweat on the floor...

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    1. thanks andrea. i like the idea of sweating out the disappointment. my problem is that i forget that humanity is fallible. glad you stopped by for a visit.

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  6. yep, let's blame it on the heat. sometimes it's just too hard to face things - there is a time and place for everything, and it doesn't always have to be now. so, for now, let's blame it on the heat.
    tightly penned, so much between the lines... a great write.
    ~Miriam

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    1. thank you miriam! sometimes it does help to deflect before you meet something head on.

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  7. Blame it on the heat, yeah and Be-Bop away the guilt! Fun read.

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    1. welcome to the lasagna! it's always nice to have a different perspective.

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  8. a true and sad little gem, Heidi ~ M

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    1. Thanks M.! i have a soft spot for a cinquain.

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  9. You're back! OK, so as I look, it appears you've been back for a couple of weeks now. So I guess I should say, "I'm back!" :)

    I think one of the toughest things to do, for me anyway, is to say a lot in a few words, which you've done here.

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    1. Hi Bone! Welcome back! It's like facebook here. I think part of the reason that i like cinquains is because of my own very short attention span. I had to learn to say what I wanted to say before I became distracted by some other thought.

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  10. Fantastic Heidi I love this short and extremely powerful and thought-provoking =)

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    1. Thanks mlm! I am going to participate in you prompt, I just haven't decided if I am going to write something or post a reworking I did a while ago of the Robber Bridegroom.

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  11. Oh, that's powerful! Not a word too many, not a word too few.

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  12. Nice poem, I like the heat!

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  13. So much in such few words...I too wish/hope it was/is the heat making us crazy.

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