swirling in the sway of the silver eddies
swept along sideways-submerged and then surfacing
gasping gulps of air gorging breath
before being caught below again.
the riptide rages not it will release you
when you relax when you surrender, when you swim
parallel to the peaceful shore paddling to the edge
then safely to the sand surviving again.
submitted to dVerse Form For All 7/12/13
Tony discusses accentual-alliteration in this dVerse prompt. I like alliteration, so this was an exciting prompt for me. My early poetry was almost always all alliteration (see how easy it is to get caught up in it?) and this is reminiscent of some of those earlier writings (you can see Eros for an example.) This was a little tricky for me and I think I took some liberties with it, but I think it's a form I'd like to try again.