Tuesday, December 3, 2013

How It Feels to Be Mrs. Roper

you interrupt me
     mid-sentence
to say you are going to bed

                                                           now

and then talk for
     ten
          more
               minutes

leaving me the

butt

of some joke
that I get
     and is never funny.

with each
            rejection
you insert both hands

into

my chest

removing my

beating

heart

to stare at
before
     casually tossing it to the ground
                                                walking away
as I scramble to

stuff
it
back
in.

heidi
written 12/3/13
edit 12/14/13

you bastard.


16 comments:

  1. Put back the "you bastard". It emphasizes that you've kept it all civilized until that point. I think it's excellent and I know who Mrs. Roper is. Hope you're not as sexually deprived as your namesake.

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    1. Mrs. Roper was my favorite.I always thought that Mr. Roper was a jerk. I originally had "you bastard" as my only comment on this post and then I chickened out. hmmm....

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  2. I'd include it. The bastard! I really like your relationshippy poems

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    1. Thanks Bone! They seem to be the easiest ones to write and the hardest ones to post.

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  3. Either way works great, though I like it better without the "you bastard". I don't think Mrs. Roper would give Stanley the satisfaction whenever possible.

    I do like it both ways though. Added, the tone is sad and bitter; without it, the tone is melancholy, but resigned. It all depends on which tone you'd like to set.

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    1. Hey Bizza! I have no idea what tone I want to set. I think that I am leaning towards erasing the question and just leaving the "you bastard".

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  4. Oh I do so like the "you bastard" Heidi - an excellent and fitting close.

    Be assured - that in defence of you - I will punch his lights out!

    Love and stuff.
    Anna :o]

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    1. Hey sweet Anna! I'll take a raincheck on the punch. Love and stuff back at you!

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  5. i think you don't need the word bastard in the poem cause when i came to the end of the last line i thought.... goodness...what a xxxx and everyone will insert their own words... just my two cents...smiles

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    1. Hey Claudia! I am all eaten up with curiosity as to what your x's were. This is really kind of cool how differently people are reacting to that ending.

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  6. i dont think you need it honestly...because i think by the end we are def all thinking it...
    what an asshat

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    1. Hey Brian. Asshat is one of my favorite words.

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  7. Brave writing Heidi! He my well deserve it I should think! Nicely!

    Hank

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  8. Sounds like you want to zing him with "bastard," your emotions responding...but I don't think the poem needs to say that...readers have come to that conclusion on their own...
    either way, this is a write I enjoyed reading every time.

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    1. Thank you! I think I am going to just leave it as my comment and take away the question.

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