The River
I stand in the river of
my actions and it drips,
drips, drips down and I
doubt if I was right, but
then I stop.
Because I know I was right,
right, right, and that I hav
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ip, drip, drip,
drip, drip, drip,
drip, drip,
drip.
heidi
written 1990?
submitted for dVerse The Poet's Toolbox
I have been writing more than I am used to lately, so I am reposting a poem that I posted in the early days of this blog, but that I wrote when I was19 or 20. I loved playing with the way the words looked on the page. (I was also heavy into alliteration). I hope you are having a lovely Valentine's Day!
Also, please check out Break the Chain from One Billion Rising
ha - this is cool how you worked the form here..standing in the river of the own actions is a cool image as well..sometimes can feel a bit like drowning...good to know in such moments that it was the right decision...
ReplyDeleteThank you Claudia. This was fun to play around with and is one of my favorites.
Deletehaha...very nice....very ee cummings for me...love how you go from regular verse to the dripping down the page accentuating your verse.....ha....nice how you go from the river to the drip as well...well played...
ReplyDeleteThank you Brian. I always appreciate your input.
DeleteOh, I love the dripping!
ReplyDeleteThanks Susan. I love the dripping too!
DeleteAwesome form here. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteThank you Gretchen!
DeleteHow kool, both visually and spoken, and presented as art. I like!
ReplyDeleteThank you Henry. Your comment made my week. Welcome to the lasagna, and I hope to see you back.
Delete...i liked it a lot... specially the drip... drip... drip... part that works so effectively in your format... great experimental vibe... smiles...
ReplyDeleteThanks Kelvin, what a nice comment. The "experimental vibe" part makes me feel rather brilliant!
DeleteWonderful visually and in words..."I stand in the river of my own actions" Love that!
ReplyDeleteThank you Susie!
Deletei like the visual presentation of your words
ReplyDeletekooky kinesthetics
Thank you Zongrik!
Deletelove the image! great read :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Insanebloom! Welcome to the lasagn, and please come back!
DeletePowerful form. ...the river of my own actions is a great metaphor.
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Thank you very much Kim. I'm glad you visited!
DeleteThe drip of blood from a heart broken..beating..mending..no matter it is never wrong..
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