|Credit: Richard Baxter|
Free Write Friday 2/15/13
She has hidden in the old house
clutching her dolly
praying for a magic that will save her.
Outside, he looks for her.
He didn't see her run into the house.
He reeks of the beer he used to try to forget his troubles.
She is little for her age and underfed.
She has been her own caregiver
and she is too young to raise a child.
He didn't start out a bad man,
or a drunk man
and he does not know what he is supposed to do with her.
She is praying for escape
squeezing her tiny eyes shut
wishing she could fly away.
He hears the sounds of birds
and looks up.
They form a dark cloud and are flying towards the old house.
She is exerting all of her strength, hoping.
She does not notice the sounds or the dark, or the motion
as the birds circle, and then lift, the house.
He watches the house fly away and
crushes his beer can with the hand holding it
and never notices.
She feels a breeze and opens her eyes.
She sees the birds.
They have saved her.
He vomits on the street.
He calls the cops, and becomes a
suspect in her missing person case.
A far way away, the birds unceremoniously
drop the house onto the grey ground.
They fly away.
He is interrogated, suspected and
she is gone. Eventually, he is released.
Her case goes cold.
She is not in Munchkinland, or Oz, or even
Kansas. But she feels free, and as she looks at the
dark skies around her, she feels safe.
written 2/25/13 for Kellie Elmore's Free Write Friday prompt for 2/15/13
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This is a late submission. I discovered some cool prompts and decided I want to do them all, so it has taken me this long to get to this one. Check out Kellie's site by clicking on the link about to find out about her Free Write Friday and to read some cool submissions. I have to admit that with this prompt (write a response to the picture about) I kept thinking about The Wizard of Oz, but I couldn't come up with anything. Last night, I was looking at this picture again and focused on the birds rather than the house, and that's when the idea hit me. I hope you like it!
There was also an interesting discussion on the dVerse blog Pretzels and Bullfights post about commenting. I am happy to get comments (not spam) and critiques. If the critique is long or complicated, or you're too shy to post it publicly, please feel free to email me . I would love to hear from you.