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Saturday, February 9, 2013
Kellie Elmore's Free Write Friday Submission: I Lie in My Bed
I Lie in My Bed
I lie in my bed
with you
to you
and then sleep whirls in.
I lie in my bed
and I dream
of a life without you
and of vague single happiness.
I lie in my bed
next to you
and the cold chills
my bare skin.
I lie in my bed
awake again and your stillness
conjures a siren's song with one rephrase
escape.
I lie in my bed
but the sheer curtains float
at my open window, blown from the winds of
a coming rain.
I lie in my bed
thumbing the opal on
my wedding ring
and I am trapped.
I lie in my bed
and the allure of leaving tortures me
as you wake and ask how I slept.
"Fine" I say
as I lie in my bed.
heidi
written 2/9/13 for http://kellieelmore.com/2013/02/08/fwf-free-write-friday-word-bank-5/
Word Bank: Opal, Vague, Whirl, Dream, Sheer, Conjure, Bare, Allure
I really wanted to write a small short story with these words, but this is what came out. Hmm, funny how that happens. I'm not sure what I think about it yet. I live in fear of being melodramatic, especially when I write poetry. It is way too easy for me to go overboard, and ruin a good concept. Thanks for stopping by and I would love to hear from you.
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"I lie in my bed
ReplyDeleteawake again and your stillness
conjures a siren's song with one rephrase
escape." I love this!!!!!!!!!!!! ...That's what I think about it! Sweet and lulling. I sigh... <3
Thanks Kellie! I enjoyed this prompt. I'm glad you liked my submission.
ReplyDeleteAs I find myself falling through each iteration, of "I lie in my bed ", I find myself slipping, sinking, into the world, the moments your poem captures. Beautiful read.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I am glad you visited and commented. I like the idea of sinking into this poem.
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