Tuesday, April 30, 2013

NaPoWriMo Day 30: Humility: A Rodomontade Rewrite

Humility

You're not
dumber than a
mouse, weaker than Argus
yuckier than Velveeta, you're
no loser.

heidi
written 4/30/13 for 
submitted also to dVerse OLN


(original version)
Rodomontade

I am
wiser than an
owl, stronger than cyclops
yummier than goat cheese I am
nonpareil.

heidi



Today is the last day of the NaPoWriMo write a poem a day challenge, and I feel a little sad. I looked forward to the new prompt each morning, I wonder how much longer I will go writing a poem every morning? It'll be cool to see. Thanks to Maureen for the great fun and all the participants (over 2000!) for sharing their work.

Today's prompt was to take a favorite short poem and write the opposite. I chose one of my own because this is my blog, dammit, and I can do that if I want to.  Rodomontade also got me a feature, so I feel a little mushy about it.  I like the way the opposite turned out. There's some extra syllables in my cinquain, but I'm like that sometimes. Thanks for joining me this month!

24 comments:

  1. I like this because it seems to say you're not... but it still doesn't denigrate you. A quiet triumph.

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  2. yummier than goat cheese ....haha...i just love this...

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  3. ha..i like how you rather reverse the flow between the two of these....

    you dont like velveeta? on a grilled cheese? smiles...

    cool verses

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    1. thanks Brian, and yes, I hate Velveeta and it seems like I am the only American who feels this way. i like grilled mozzarella or feta or goat cheese (bonus if there's also pesto on that sandwich.)

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  4. Well! You're no loser either. Nicely done and congrats on making it though the month with style!

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  5. great images here. i like the goat cheese. what about goat yogurt?

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    1. i'm not the biggest fan of yogurt, but i may have to try goat yogurt :)

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  6. Great sense of images throughout--and I do like yucky Velveeta!

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    1. Thanks Audrey! Welcome to the lasagna. I think that I am in a minority when it comes to the Velveeta.

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  7. Well, that makes you a winner in my estimation. Are we still allowed to have winners? Fun flip on the original and defining by negation.

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  8. I think that's great to flip your own poem, and well done with Napowrimo.

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  9. Self-affirmation, we all desire a little convincing every now and then. A simple send-off, perhaps each new day, given a lilt in our step.

    Your piece simply said, power in that.

    Nicely done.

    Cheers!

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  10. love looking at things from other sides, great job on this.

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  11. Love your words Heidi. Yummier that goats cheese - I am certain of that!

    Kind regards
    Anna :o]

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    1. Hi Anna! I may have been bragging a bit...it's hard to imagine anything yummier than goat cheese.

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